Today, I watched a video in the youtube, It’s said wasting time is killing your life. That’s sound horrible. But when I rethought about it, I understood . Every time I said I’ll do it later, the fact is I’ll never do it. that‘s human nature, people always want to stay comfortable zones. so do I, In these days, I realized how important the time is. There are so manny great thing I want to do, but I spent so much time to the useless thing in the past.
Now, I’ll make a new sentence with a new word that I learnt today. the new word is “recipient”.
The man sent the delivery to the recipient with a kind smile.
优化后的日记 (Revised Diary):
Title: Wasting Time: A Wake-Up Call
Or: Time Management and My New Word
Today, I watched a YouTube video titled “Wasting Time is Killing Your Life.” It sounded so harsh! But after thinking it over, I realized its truth. Every time I say, “I’ll do it later,” the reality is I’ll probably never do it. That’s human nature—we often cling to our comfort zones, and I’m no exception. Recently, I’ve realized how precious time truly is. There are so many great things I want to achieve, yet I’ve wasted countless hours on trivial things in the past.
Now, I’ll practice the new word “recipient” in a sentence:
With a kind smile, the man delivered the package to the recipient.
具体修改解析 (Breakdown of Corrections):
- Grammar & Vocabulary (语法和词汇):
in the youtube→ on YouTube (专有名词，前置词用on)It’s said wasting...→ a YouTube video titled “…” (更自然)That’s sound horrible→ It sounded so harsh! (时态一致 + 更地道表达)I rethought about it→ after thinking it over (固定搭配)I understood→ I realized its truth (补充对象更清晰)the fact is I’ll never do it→ the reality is I’ll probably never do it (用probably软化绝对语气)people always want to stay comfortable zones→ we often cling to our comfort zones (动词cling to更精准 + 用we体现共性)so do I→ and I’m no exception (升级表达)In these days→ Recently (更简洁)how important the time is→ how precious time truly is (precious替换important强化情感)manny→ many (拼写错误)spent so much time to the useless thing→ wasted countless hours on trivial things (动词upgrade + 名词优化)
- Sentence Structure (句式优化):
- 合并句子增强逻辑："But after… truth" 替代原文两个短句。
- 用破折号解释因果："That’s human nature—we…"
- 现在完成时强调持续影响："I’ve wasted… past."
- New Word Practice (新词造句):
- 原句：语法正确但可更精炼
- 优化： 调整语序使核心动作突出
With a kind smile, the man delivered the package to the recipient.▶︎ 强调"递送"动作（delivered），“recipient"位置更自然
- 优化： 调整语序使核心动作突出
- 扩展学习 (Optional):
- 被动表达：
The recipient received the package with a smile. - 正式场景：
As the award recipient, she thanked the committee.
- 被动表达：
- 原句：语法正确但可更精炼
值得肯定的亮点 (What You Did Well):
- ✅ 真实场景学习：通过视频引发思考，结合自身经历输出英语
- ✅ 新词立即应用：用"recipient"造句巩固记忆（有效学习法！）
- ✅ 反思深刻：对拖延心理的认知非常到位（comfort zones洞察精准）
语言学习建议 (Learning Tips):
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替换基础词汇升级表达：
- important → crucial/essential/precious
- a lot of → numerous/countless
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避免绝对化描述：
- 用tend to/probably/often替代"always/never”(例：People tend to avoid discomfort → 更客观)
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破折号（—）使用场景：解释前文时替代逗号，强化语气：
“Procrastination is tempting—it’s our brain’s shortcut to comfort.”