Today, It was so hot. I took a walk alone after dinner . I often do that in recent days, and liked the feeling. last week, I have checked my body on hospital , the doctor told me I shouldn’t eat too much and take exercise. that true. after finished my walk. I felt comfortable.
The day, I learnt a new word “accumulate”, and now , I’ll practice the new word in a sentence:
- By accumulating money for many years, I can afford the dream car.
Evening Walk & New Words
Today was extremely hot. After dinner, I took a walk alone—something I’ve been doing regularly recently. I really enjoy it. Last week at my hospital checkup, the doctor advised me to eat less and exercise more, which makes perfect sense. After my walk tonight, I felt refreshed.
I learned the word “accumulate” today. Here’s my practice sentence:
By accumulating savings over many years, I can finally afford my dream car.
错误解析 & 学习建议
| 原文表达 | 问题点 | 优化方案 | 学习提示 |
|---|---|---|---|
| It was so hot | 略口语化 | Today was extremely hot | 加时间主语更规范 |
| I often do that in recent days | 时态冲突(recent用现在完成时) | I’ve been doing regularly recently | “近期习惯"用: have been doing |
| checked my body on hospital | 介词错误/不地道 | at my hospital checkup | 固定搭配: at the hospital / have a checkup |
| I shouldn’t eat too much and take exercise | 歧义(否定范围) | eat less and exercise more | 医嘱规范表达 |
| that true | 遗漏be动词 | which makes perfect sense | 完整句需主语+动词 |
| after finished my walk | 逻辑主语混乱 | After my walk tonight | 用名词代替从句更简洁 |